Could use some work
I don't want to sound like an ass and all, but I have a few things to say about this flash. Note that this is my opinion.
1. The voice acting and quality was bad. It could use some adjustments and some characteristics.
2. The story was boring me to tears. It's nothing new but the same old stories/movies/videos I see and watch everyday.
3. I know everyone likes anime nowadays but you should try making your own style. I'm not saying make it look like crap but at to where alot of people would like it. Anime is getting a little overated and cliche now. I too am trying to change that habit.
4. The animation was decent. I'd rather you to try a little better since it looked a little miss-shaped at the character's face.
That would be my constructive criticism. Like I said before, I didn't meant to be an ass or anything like that. Just giving you a few minor suggestions. I hope to see more of your work.